Would you be so kind as to read my poetry and write a comment on it thanks!
http://www.postpoems.com/members/steveward1/
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magicmusician
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Some of your poems are very close to plain prose, however you show through your poetry that you can keep a rhythm while telling a story. Be careful about leading lines - if you read it to yourself, and a line that leads into the next stanza doesn't quite fit with the rhythm, try another. Some of your shorter poems start off very well (such as the nursery crime ones) but fail to finish with the same flair. An example would be the end of Nursery Crimes #6, the second stanza has too longer first sentence and the last sentence doesn't fully match. Another small thing is incorrect grammar at occasional points in your poetry. In cases where this increases the "authenticity" of the poem (such as time frame or class of person) it's ok, but you seem to be leaving them there accidentally. Overall I say you have some real talent, but you just need to critique your own poetry a little better at the end (hard to do, I know!) Hope my criticism helps a little. :) Good luck
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