Is this a good way to start a story?
Peter Bumby had just turned thirteen. He was quite tall for his age and well-built. He had short blond hair and blue eyes. This morning he was wearing a clean white shirt tucked in and his navy school tie with yellow stripes was neatly tied. Instead of his usual navy school ones, today he wore a new pair of smart grey flannel trousers, fastened with a black belt. His black shoes were well-polished.
As he was walking to school a girl in his class came up behind him. She was slightly shorter than he was and had long dark hair. Her name was Rachel Pearson. She was wearing a white blouse and a navy skirt.
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I think it's a good start to a story. I like when stories have immediate character descriptions like this. Authors often wait a while to describe a character's appearance, and by that point I've imagined them to look completely different. I think it's a good opening because not only does the reader get physical characteristics right away, but we also know they are on their way to school without you having to actually say it. By the way, is Rachel wearing knee socks with her school outfit?
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Mr Donnelly "Good morning Mr. Bumby," said Rachel. "Good morning Miss Pearson," Peter replied. "Mr. Bumby," said Rachel, "you look different today." "It's my new trousers," said Peter. "They're very smart. I like grey." "Thank you."
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