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Lost In Shadow Here i stay, Waiting, Watching, Planning, For the day these chains no longer bind me. Patiently awaiting the day, I can step out of the shadows that hide me. Screaming silently for the day, That i no longer have to fear what i hold inside of me. But until then i wander the shadows, Lost, Afraid, Broken, With nobody beside me. (i realize it doesn't rhyme, it wasn't meant to) I revised again
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I really like it. I describes how I feel deep inside at the moment. Well done.
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Cut along the vein, it will relieve the world of your awful self-indulging "poetry".
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nice wods I could feel the suffocation you are undergoing in the cruel world but still your soul tries to strive for the light... good one I could feel the pain you had in your words....
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It is not a poem but is good at conveying emotion.
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Not bad. I'd like to see it formatted, though ... Maybe something like this?: Here i stay, waiting, watching, planning, for the day these chains no longer bind me. Patiently awaiting the day that i can step out of the shadows that hide me. Screaming silently for the day that i no longer have to fear what i hold inside of me. But until then i wander the shadows, lost, afraid, [and -unnecessary for a poem] broken with nobody beside me. (Just a first-blush formatting. It's not really a poem as you formatted it at first. It's more a paragraph from a novel.) Now, give it a name. ;-)
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The promise of a new day is always desired. I can relate to how the words in the poem hope for a new beginning in each day, but the sorrow seems to fade with no newness, just the same despair.
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Too gloomy -- maybe you need counseling.
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it opened a window for a peak at you in that time . nicely done ;-)
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+5 who told you about me ?
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very nice.. i like the gloom within it... i would not use "me" at the end of most of your phrases(is that what you call them) i am looking to startinto writing a book of poetry.. i am 16 and i like dark matters like this poem here... it gives me inspiration
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I so relate to this poem I love it great job
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