ANSWERS: 9
  • Angel From Above My worries and my fears My cries and my tears, They fill my mind in my head They torture me in my bed, Like a tormenting visage They push me to the edge, They make me lose all concern They drag me to the point of no return, A heavy heart filled with doubt Sweating, tossing, and rolling about, Falling deeper and deeper into the abyss Why did it have to happen like this...? With a soft kiss I awake from my dreams With a gentle touch you put me at ease, Pulling me close and holding my hand Sitting me up and helping me stand, You bring me up and calm me down You bring a smile to my face and wipe away my frown, You fill my heart with joy and light You stand me up and help me fight, To live and be happy your all I require Your my hearts only desire, Your my life and my love Your my angel from above...
  • I think that she will love it! Its good
  • I would rework the last verse, it sounds good to me. Look at producing a song out of this!
  • anyone else? comments? :P
  • Its really good, she will love it.:)
  • It could be more elegant but it's not bad. Check for typos. Kudos for the effort.
  • It's alright. I've seen better, but I've also seen worse.
  • You tried to hard I think, sometimes the attempt to make every thing rhyme can make it feel contrived. Simplify things be descriptive without using so many Words. IE: the first line; My worries and fears, My cries and Tears, Consumes my mind and clutters my head Tortured every night when I go to bed
  • I think it's good.

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